恩波2009年12月英語六級(jí)作文范文16篇
（一）Fire Prevention on Campus
1.前段時(shí)間校園火災(zāi)頻發(fā)，造成生命和財(cái)產(chǎn)損失
2.分析火災(zāi)發(fā)生的原因
3.作為學(xué)生，如何預(yù)防校園火災(zāi)發(fā)生
●審題概述●
這是一分析火災(zāi)原因和如何預(yù)防火災(zāi)為中心的文章，撰寫時(shí)重點(diǎn)即在于此。開篇綜述校園火災(zāi)頻發(fā)情形及造成的生命和財(cái)產(chǎn)損失，然后說明火災(zāi)原因，最后提出可能的火災(zāi)預(yù)防措施。第一段，主要概述；第二段，說明原因；第三段，詳細(xì)論述措施。
【范文】
??? People are alarmed by the succession of campus fires in recent years. In each of these accidents, heavy casualties were reported – houses were burned down, students lost their lives, and properties were damaged. Faced with such a chilling fact, people keep asking, “What on earth results in these repeated tragedies?”
??? A brief survey of them reveals that human factors still prove to be the leading causes. For example, three of these fires were caused by the students’ use of electric water-heaters. As students often leave the heaters unattended, the risks are rather high should the water in the bottle boil dry while no one is around to turn off the power. In other cases, fires were also caused by stoves, candles, cigarette butts, etc.
??? Since most of these disasters could have been prevented if proper precautions had been taken, students should be better educated on the importance and measures of fire control. The following three reminders are of particular importance for us students: First, learn how to use a fire extinguisher. Second, double-check candles, heaters, stoves and other electric appliances, and make sure there are no open flames before leaving rooms. Lastly, do not smoke in the dorm.
◇第一段思路點(diǎn)評(píng)：概述并引入下文
◇語言點(diǎn)提示：
（1）此句What on earth results in these repeated tragedies? 常可作為過渡句，引出下文
（2）注意描述有關(guān)火災(zāi)客觀事實(shí)，多使用被動(dòng)語態(tài)，如are alarmed by，were reported，were burned down，were damaged，F(xiàn)aced with。
◇第二段思路點(diǎn)評(píng)：論述火災(zāi)的主要原因是使用電熱水器，還有造成火災(zāi)的次要原因是實(shí)用電爐、蠟燭和亂扔煙蒂◇語言點(diǎn)提示：electric water-heaters電熱水器
◇第三段思路點(diǎn)評(píng)：詳述預(yù)防火災(zāi)的三點(diǎn)措施，注意使用連接詞語first, second, lastly。
◇語言點(diǎn)提示：
take precautions采取預(yù)防措施
fire extinguisher滅火器
（二）Enhance Awareness to Guard against Campus Thefts
1. 校園盜竊案件時(shí)有發(fā)生
2. 物品被盜的原因
3. 學(xué)生如何加強(qiáng)防盜意識(shí)
●審題概述●
這是一篇論述校園物品被盜和加強(qiáng)防盜意識(shí)的文章。第一段，主要陳述校園盜竊案件發(fā)生的情況。第二段，主要分析校園物品被盜的原因。第三段，主要闡述學(xué)生怎樣增強(qiáng)防盜意識(shí)。
【范文】
??? “If you don’t want to wake up and find you have no pants to wear, you’d better put them on in sleep,” goes a popular joke among students. Obviously, campus thefts have become increasingly annoying as they occur far more often than before. And it seems that the thieves are less choosy these days, with their targets ranging widely from bikes, cell phones, purses, pre-paid IC cards to sunglasses, bags, and even underwear. In short, anything that worth a dime is likely to be stolen.
??? What makes students the easy targets? The reasons are not hard to find. But I believe of all these reasons, the lack of anti-theft alertness is the most important. For lack of alertness, the students tend to leave the doors and windows wide open during sleep at noon or at night in summer. For the same reason, they’ll also leave their bikes unlocked before a store or by a road, or forget to take away their personal stuff before they go out of the classroom to make a phone call. These acts undoubtedly have increased their exposure to the light-fingered monsters.
??? In order to minimize possible losses, the students must stay on guard in the first place, as awareness of the thefts around often makes a big difference. To be more specific, the students should not hide any tempting amount of cash in the dorm. Put it in the bank instead. Besides, do not leave any valuable items unattended. Take them wherever you go. In addition, it’s advisable to develop a neighbourhood watch programme with other students in the dorm and neighbouring dorms.
◇第一段思路點(diǎn)評(píng)：陳述校園盜竊案件發(fā)生的情況
◇語言點(diǎn)提示：it seems that此句型表示一種可能性
◇第二段思路點(diǎn)評(píng)：說明被盜原因
◇語言點(diǎn)提示：
（1）What makes students the easy targets?此句引出下文
（2）anti-theft alertness防盜意識(shí)
（3）lack of alertness缺乏警惕
（4）light-fingered小偷小摸的、慣行扒竊的
◇第三段思路點(diǎn)評(píng)：闡述如何加強(qiáng)防盜意識(shí)
◇語言點(diǎn)提示：注意關(guān)聯(lián)詞語in the first place，Besides，In addition的使用可使行文更富邏輯性。
（三）How Will Our Life Go on without Internet?
1. 網(wǎng)絡(luò)提供給了人們豐富多彩和便捷的生活
2. 很多人開始感覺離開網(wǎng)絡(luò)寸步難行
3. 你對(duì)網(wǎng)絡(luò)依賴癥的看法
● 審題概述●
本文是一篇論述你對(duì)網(wǎng)絡(luò)與人們生活關(guān)系的文章。第一段，側(cè)重簡(jiǎn)述網(wǎng)絡(luò)給人們生活的多彩、便利。第二段，詳述網(wǎng)絡(luò)與人們生活的緊密度。第三段，論述對(duì)網(wǎng)絡(luò)依賴的觀點(diǎn)。
【范文一】
??? If asked whether the Internet is the greatest discovery of the 20th century, my answer would be yes. The Internet has drawn the world closer together, realized countless incredible dreams, and provided modern people with a great many conveniences and a brilliant life.
??? Today, many people simply feel they cannot live without the Internet. Governments publish their latest policies and decisions online for worldwide recognition. Political campaigns are often done online to gain wider public support. Companies and enterprises resort to the Internet for more business opportunities and potential customers home and abroad. Universities and researchers turn to the Internet if they’d seek international cooperation or funding. Common folks like us also rely on the cyber world in various ways, for communication, entertainment, banking and shopping.
??? True, the power of the Internet is all pervasive and its many negative effects are already visible. For example, Internet addicts tend to withdraw to their own fantasy world rather than communicate with a real person. Children are exposed to online pornography and violence. Internet frauds are an everyday occurrence. In view of all this, you are advised to use the Internet with wisdom. Keep it at a safe distance and never lose yourself.
◇第一段思路點(diǎn)評(píng)：綜述網(wǎng)絡(luò)給人們生活帶來的多彩和便捷。兩個(gè)長(zhǎng)句足矣。第一句用if引導(dǎo)的條件句引出“網(wǎng)絡(luò)”話題，第二句概述網(wǎng)絡(luò)帶給多彩和便捷的生活。
◇語言點(diǎn)提示：
has drawn…, realized, and provided此為謂語連動(dòng)式的運(yùn)用。
◇第二段思路點(diǎn)評(píng)：詳述網(wǎng)絡(luò)與人們生活的緊密關(guān)系，先總述，后分述。
◇語言點(diǎn)提示：
resort to借助、訴諸、求助于
◇第三段思路點(diǎn)評(píng)：先陳述人們對(duì)網(wǎng)絡(luò)的依賴，再談對(duì)此的看法。
◇語言點(diǎn)提示：
（1）negative effects副作用、反面作用
（2）addicts成癮者、依戀者
（3）fantasy world虛擬世界、虛幻世界
（4）pornography色情表演、色情作品
（5）fraud欺騙、詐騙
【范文二】
???? As a primary source of information as well as an efficient means of communication, the Internet offers people a colourful and convenient life. Just by clicking the mouse, we can enjoy a brilliant and easy life that could not be achieved ever before: shopping, making friends, contacting relatives, looking for jobs, downloading music and movies, conducting business deals, and freely airing our opinions.
???? For its convenience, the Internet has attracted people like magnets and some people even claim that it is indispensable. To them, life can’t go on without it. Every day millions of people spend hours on end surfing the Internet. They are obsessed with it so much so that they forget many other important matters.
???? As for me, I don’t approve of unrestrained Internet reliance. Although the Internet is a gift of the technological revolution and a blessing of this information age, we should never let it control our life. The Internet absolutely doesn’t mean the whole world to us. Instead, we should guard against its negative effects. To those Internet addicts, I would add: “Self-control can make or break your life. With proper use, the Internet serves you; otherwise, it kills you.”
