Introduction

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思路拓展改寫題目→模板式套話→引出中心論點(diǎn)：我認(rèn)為教師和學(xué)生都應(yīng)該參與對(duì)老師的教學(xué)評(píng)估

模板式套話

This is a complex issue.

破題

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In regard to the evaluation of teachers and theirperformance,some believe that they should be evaluated by other teachers,while others think they should be judged by their students.

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如果開頭實(shí)在不知道如何展開，可以簡(jiǎn)單地復(fù)述題目。

中心論點(diǎn)

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I believe that a teacher should be evaluated by both teachers andstudents. In my opinion, only in this way can a teacher be judgedfairly.

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習(xí)慣了一邊倒的論證，本文帶給大家另一種段落展開方式，即結(jié)合兩種說(shuō)法和觀點(diǎn)。

Essay Body

Paragraph 1

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思路拓展本段論點(diǎn)：只由學(xué)生參與評(píng)估會(huì)產(chǎn)生問題→解釋本段論點(diǎn)→總結(jié)

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本段論點(diǎn)

To begin with, I do not agree that teachers should be rated bytheir students alone, as this is incredibly problematic.

解釋論點(diǎn)

Students are likely to judge teachers by how well they like ordislike that teacher and not necessarily on the quality of theirlessons. If a male teacher is very handsome, or a female teacheris very beautiful, they may receive higher scores from students ofthe opposite sex. If a teacher doesn’t give homework, or allows hisor her students to watch movies in class, then they may receivehigher marks than they deserve.

結(jié)論

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This is especially true of teenagers in secondary school.

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為了避免例子以偏概全，可以加這么一句話，這樣顯得很全面。

Paragraph 2

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思路拓展本段論點(diǎn)：只讓其他教師來(lái)給某個(gè)教師做評(píng)估也有失公允→解釋論點(diǎn)：為什么有失公允→舉例：我的一個(gè)歷史老師的遭遇→總結(jié)

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本段論點(diǎn)

On the other hand, it would also be a mistake to allow onlyteachers to judge other teachers on their performance.

解釋論點(diǎn)

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Since other teachers are also workmates, competition betweenworkmates is inevitable, which might result in biased judgment.

舉例

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One of my history professors is very knowledgeable, with a goodreputation among students for his expertise in history. However, hewas not welcomed by other professors in the history departmentdue to the jealousy of other teachers.

結(jié)論

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As you can imagine, competition between teachers mightresult in negative feelings such as hatred, envy, and suspicion.Therefore, teachers might not always judge other teachers’performances fairly.

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僅由老師之間互相評(píng)估會(huì)有什么問題。

Conclusion

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思路拓展重申原因：兩種評(píng)價(jià)各有問題→因此評(píng)價(jià)要結(jié)合兩者

重申原因

In regard to teacher evaluation, there are manycomplexities andinherent(內(nèi)在的，固有的) problems.

結(jié)論

The best way to assess the actual quality of instruction would beto measure teachers’ reviews of their peers, the students’ reviewsof their instructors, and finally to take into account all the examscores of the students. Rating teachers’ performance is a complexissue. Including both other teachers’ and students’ evaluationswould be a good step in evaluating teachersfairly.