On Excessive Packaging

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Wandering at the supermarkets, you could find that the shelves are filled with fancy and excessively-packaged goods with high price, especially when festivals approach. Although the government has much concerns over this issue, the phenomena are still common.

The reasons can be listed as follows. First, manufacturers could benefit from the over-packaging. Fancy packaging would increase the price to a large extent, from which they can earn more money. Secondly, some of the goods are brought and sent as gifts to our relatives and superiors. Gorgeously packaged gifts would be more attractive and add “face” to the one who buys and sends them.

From my point of view, excessive packaging is a waste of resources and money. Most people would throw the package away after they open it, which would lay heavier burden to our environment. To prevent this, every citizen should be aware of the problem, and strict laws must be made or reinforced to restrict the manufactures from excessive packaging.

【解析】

本次寫作延續(xù)了傳統(tǒng)的出題方式，即英文題目+ 中文解析，但同時也繼續(xù)了去年的一點小改動，對字數(shù)作了明確的限定。對于考生而言，商品過度包裝本身已是日常生活的熱點話題，大家比較熟悉，能有較多發(fā)揮空間。

在寫作過程當(dāng)中，最重要的是要理清思路，將文章的邏輯關(guān)系理清。范文中，作者第一段描述了這一現(xiàn)象；第二段中，開篇便點出了主題，一目了然，列出了出現(xiàn)這一現(xiàn)象的原因；最后一段里，作者發(fā)表總結(jié)了自己的一些觀點。全文條理較為清晰。

其次，在句型方面，建議考生使用長短句交錯的方式，這樣節(jié)奏便較為明朗。

最后，用詞方面，文章對“過度包裝”使用了多種表達方式，如fancy packaging, luxurious packaging, glorious packaging等等。這樣文章便不會顯得“干燥”，讓閱卷老師懷疑你的詞匯量。因此，同學(xué)們在平時一定要注意同義詞、詞組的替換和使用。