托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作雖然不要求大家要應(yīng)用多復(fù)雜，多高級(jí)的詞匯，但是能拿到托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作高分的考生都是盡量避免初級(jí)詞匯的，下面通過(guò)五個(gè)例子來(lái)說(shuō)明。
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1.Original: We know that sometimes success is measured by how much money you earn.

Revised: It does not surprise us to discover that sometimes success is measured in terms of the money you earn.

專(zhuān)家點(diǎn)評(píng)：know是非常初級(jí)的詞匯，作文中出現(xiàn)I believe that…，I know that…這樣的表達(dá)只能體現(xiàn)考生寫(xiě)作技巧的稚嫩，用It does not surprise us to discover that…替換We know that…并沒(méi)有改變?cè)涞暮x，卻使全句頓時(shí)增添了亮點(diǎn)。

2.Original: We all know that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply.

Revised: It goes without saying that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply.

專(zhuān)家點(diǎn)評(píng)：同上例一樣，know這樣的初級(jí)詞匯應(yīng)避免在作文中使用，It goes without saying that…是一個(gè)固定結(jié)構(gòu)，意思是“……是不言而喻的”，常在作文中用來(lái)引經(jīng)據(jù)典或表明一個(gè)盡人皆知的道理，類(lèi)似的表達(dá)還有：

An old saying goes that…

Proverb goes that…

It is universally acknowledged that…

It is generally accepted that…

3.Original: Some other people think that people should read extensively.

Revised: Another position says that people should read extensively.

專(zhuān)家點(diǎn)評(píng)：同know一樣，think也應(yīng)該盡量避免使用，修改后的句子中是用Another position says that…代替think提出另一種觀點(diǎn)，也可以用hold a point of view，hold the opinion這樣的短語(yǔ)替換。

4.Original: The unexpected win of the match give us confidence.

Revised: The unexpected win of the match boost our confidence.

專(zhuān)家點(diǎn)評(píng)：give也屬于英語(yǔ)中最初級(jí)、最基本的詞匯，也是中國(guó)學(xué)生最喜歡在托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作中應(yīng)用的詞。這個(gè)詞只表示“給，給予”這個(gè)動(dòng)作，不涉及動(dòng)作的性質(zhì)和狀態(tài)，若表示增添信心，增強(qiáng)士氣，比較地道的說(shuō)法是用boost confidence/morale，如：The change of management has boosted morale throughout the company. 管理模式的改變使整個(gè)公司上下士氣倍受鼓舞。

5.Original: The use of drugs has increased greatly in the last ten years.
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Revised: The use of drugs has increased significantly in the last ten years.

專(zhuān)家點(diǎn)評(píng)：greatly是一般用語(yǔ)，表示程度高，“很，非?！?，使用相當(dāng)普遍而沒(méi)有新意，在托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作中應(yīng)盡量避免使用這些通俗而又陳舊的詞匯，應(yīng)換用一些更加正式，更有說(shuō)服力的詞語(yǔ)，例如significantly表示達(dá)到了非常重要的或可觀的程度，“重大的，可觀的”，能夠具體說(shuō)明藥品使用方面，增長(zhǎng)幅度巨大。significantly還可以替換成considerably，tremendously等，同樣具有不錯(cuò)的表達(dá)效果。

通過(guò)以上五個(gè)例子的對(duì)比，大家就可以發(fā)現(xiàn)避免初級(jí)詞匯在托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作中占據(jù)的重要地位。但是這些都是需要大家在平時(shí)對(duì)詞匯進(jìn)行大量的積累和不斷地練習(xí)才能達(dá)到的。