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Doing Shopping Online?

With the development of the Internet, shopping is no longer a tiring thing. Just click your mouse to choose the articles you like, and the purchase is done. You don’t even have to step out of the room. It seems all easy and quick.

However, people’s opinions vary on this trend. Some believe that on line shopping is time and money saving. With plentiful selection options, they can buy whatever they like at any time convenient. Still others insist that mis-purchasing alone is annoying enough, not to mention the credibility of the sellers and the safety of their accounts.

In my opinion, the convenience and excitement of on line shopping is beyond all doubts. In the meantime, we must always bear in mind that certain traps do exist, so we’d better make sure the sellers are trustworthy before buying. In addition, we should also guard ourselves from the potential hackers who might steal our account information.

文章點(diǎn)評(píng)：

這是一篇“中等偏上”的學(xué)生作文。 本文先對(duì)網(wǎng)購熱潮進(jìn)行簡(jiǎn)介，引出全篇；接著對(duì)網(wǎng)絡(luò)購物的正反兩方面進(jìn)行對(duì)比；最后提出自己的看法結(jié)束全篇。整體看思路清晰，邏輯嚴(yán)密，行文流暢，用語較為地道。

下面說一下這篇文章的有待提高之處：

1. 文章結(jié)構(gòu)上，能看得出該同學(xué)試圖采用議論文的“三段式”（提出問題、分析問題、解決問題）。 但是，以“With the development of the Internet”為開首語，有些落入俗套，有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加注意，應(yīng)該能寫出更好的句子。

2. 微觀語言點(diǎn)方面，有些語句稍顯啰嗦，比如With plentiful selection options… 簡(jiǎn)化成With plentiful selections… 更好，意思沒有絲毫減損，表達(dá)力反而增強(qiáng)許多；

高分版

Nowadays, can we find a person who has not experienced online shopping? Definitely not. Online shopping is coming into fashion in most of cities due to the rapid development of internet technology.

Online shopping is welcomed by most people due to various reasons. From the perspective of consumer, it can save some time for people who don’t have much spare time. Just click the mouse, they can get whatever they want while staying at home. For the retailers, it can cut some costs for those who don’t have much circulating funds. They don’t have to rent a house and spend money on employees compared with the traditional trade mode. However, there are still some defects in online shopping. First, face to face deal makes online shopping less reliable and trustworthy. Second, people will lose the fun of bargain.

It is undeniable that shopping on the internet has become an irresistible trend in modern society. It’s of great urgency that we need to regulate the relative laws in accordance with the rapid growth of online shopping. Only in this way can we enjoy the pleasure and convenience of online shopping without the concern of being treated.

點(diǎn)評(píng)：本次四級(jí)作文探討的是最近的熱點(diǎn)話題之一——互聯(lián)網(wǎng)網(wǎng)購。目前網(wǎng)購的風(fēng)靡程度是眾所周知，因此，考生對(duì)于該話題還是比較熟悉的。但是，比較特殊的是，題干所列出的要求的是考生從一個(gè)客觀的角度來闡述該話題，而不是簡(jiǎn)單陳述自己的意見。所以，考生應(yīng)當(dāng)審清楚題，在寫作時(shí)不僅僅要列出網(wǎng)購的優(yōu)點(diǎn)，還必須給出相應(yīng)的缺點(diǎn)。

按照四級(jí)作文的要求，考生在第一段時(shí)應(yīng)該總述現(xiàn)象并引出話題；

第二段考生應(yīng)當(dāng)從正反兩方面來論述網(wǎng)購，分別鋪陳其優(yōu)缺點(diǎn)；關(guān)于優(yōu)點(diǎn)，網(wǎng)購的優(yōu)點(diǎn)很多，考生可擇其最突出顯著的方面來闡述，比如說網(wǎng)購可以節(jié)省很多時(shí)間；網(wǎng)購可以節(jié)省很多成本開支等；其次，缺點(diǎn)方面考生可以把重心放在誠信方面；為了不至于跟優(yōu)點(diǎn)相比，缺點(diǎn)方面太輕，考生可以考慮稍微提一下其他缺點(diǎn)，比如說與傳統(tǒng)購物相比，網(wǎng)購少去了很多砍價(jià)的樂趣；

第三點(diǎn)要求考生對(duì)于第二段列出的缺點(diǎn)給出自己的建議。此處我們可以根據(jù)第二段列出的缺點(diǎn)方面給出相應(yīng)的防范應(yīng)對(duì)措施。
整篇作文話題比較好展開，難度不大，只要考生審好題，列出相應(yīng)點(diǎn)，相信作文不會(huì)是難題。

外教版

Online shopping has been a boon to many industries and companieslooking to expand their markets. Also, it’s convenient for shoppers who are too busy to leave the house. However, in some cases nothing can replace a true face to face shopping experience.?

Internet shopping is convenient for the mothers who spend all day doing house chores and for the fathers who work a full-time job. On the other hand, there are limits to shopping online, for example: guessing the correct size of clothing on a computer screen can be very frustrating.

For the busy mother and father, online shopping is a very useful and convenient tool. But, there are instances, like clothes shopping, where nothing beats the real thing. ?

點(diǎn)評(píng)：

作者在第一段描述了網(wǎng)購作為一種時(shí)尚給大家的生活帶來了便利，然后話鋒一轉(zhuǎn)，說網(wǎng)購仍然取代不了面對(duì)面的購物交流。
第二段主要還是從正反兩方面分析了網(wǎng)購的優(yōu)勢(shì)和不足，以此描述大家對(duì)網(wǎng)購的不同反應(yīng)。
第三段作者表明了自己的觀點(diǎn)，對(duì)網(wǎng)購的便利和不足之處都做了描述。

綜合來講，本篇文章觀點(diǎn)明確，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，語言表達(dá)地道，有不少閃光詞匯，但是，內(nèi)容深度上來講還有些欠缺，另外，最后一部分表達(dá)個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)，和第二段稍有重復(fù)?？忌枰⒁庥^點(diǎn)的清晰，不宜模棱兩可。?

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