【雅思大作文】寫作的低分原因
讓步段是一種實(shí)用性很強(qiáng)的寫作段落,對話題的支持會起到非常好的效果。根據(jù)多年的教學(xué)經(jīng)驗(yàn)和實(shí)踐,筆者發(fā)現(xiàn)讓步段非常適用于五段式的雅思大作文里。本文中,專家將就讓步段的主要寫法作一個系統(tǒng)的小結(jié):
一、 五段式中用于第三個主體段
在五段式的大作文中,三個主體段一般都是以“單邊”的方式,“一邊倒”的支持某一個觀點(diǎn)。而若將最后一個主體段寫成讓步段,不僅可以照顧到反方的論點(diǎn),而且更有利于進(jìn)一步支持和強(qiáng)化本段的觀點(diǎn),從而起到強(qiáng)化論述的效果:
Obviously, not every celebrity is generous. Some, I am sure, keep all their money for themselves. But there are people like Bill Gates who are well known for making donations, attending charitable functions and taking part in a range of activities that support people less fortunate than themselves.
在寫讓步段的時候,我們必須要使用表“轉(zhuǎn)折”的連詞,常用的有but, however, nevertheless, nonetheless等。有時候我們還可以使用讓步狀語從句來引導(dǎo)讓步段,涉及的連詞有:despite, in spite of, although, though, even though, even if等。在上面這個例子中,我們看到作者用了2個簡單句來描寫反面的觀點(diǎn),對于用來描寫反面觀點(diǎn)的句子,建議一般以1—3句話為宜,而轉(zhuǎn)折后的句子,通常在長度上要超過前面的句子。下面我們再來看一個讓步段:
題目:Very few school children learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as part of the school curriculum. Do you agree with this statement?
It is possibly true that schools could try to make children understand the importance of all these areas, but children are young and cannot look into the future or predict the skills that they will need.
上面這個讓步段非常簡潔,請注意作者使用的句型:“It is possibly true that.……”,這是我們在讓步段里經(jīng)常用來開頭的句型。下面我們再來看看如何用讓步狀語從句引導(dǎo)讓步段:
Although watching TV or playing computer games do enrich children‘s spare time and broaden their horizon to some extent, a sedentary lifestyle reduces healthy outdoor activities and will have long-term medical consequences for children. An increasing number of children suffer from obesity and near-sightedness as a result of spending too much time in front of a flashing screen.
在這個段落中,作者使用了讓步狀語從句,在繼續(xù)論述“久坐”的生活方式對孩子健康方面的弊端前,先說了一下它的優(yōu)點(diǎn),進(jìn)而反駁,從而起到了鮮明的對比反差效果,突出了這種生活方式對孩子健康造成的巨大傷害。